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A Love Song That Doesn't Say Love
 
Do you remember how we'd lay in the grass,
And talk about our feelings as if they were the weather?
Yeah, we were just casual like that.
We'd treat every tale the other told as if it were
almost true, because we were too good to tell a lie, and
of course we were too bad to tell the truth.
 
And I drew a picture of a clock
On a blank piece of paper, it's a present
To that girl who just needed some more time.
I don't have the time,
I don't have the time.
 
And you were so cutely oblivious to
The significance of the moments that we spent
in my dreams under the sky so blue.
Wasted time playing in the street,
Isn't a waste of time when I'm with you.
 
Do you remember how we'd lay in the grass,
And talk about our feelings as if they were the weather?
Yeah, we were just casual like that.
We'd treat every tale the other told as if it were
almost true, because we were too good to tell a lie, and
of course we were too bad to tell the truth.
 
And during the days I spent without music,
Because you didn't think I could do it,
My only hope was just to hear your entracing voice.
Nobody was listening,
I just wanted you to sing me something.
 
And second-hand smoke stole my breath
Like you did before the rest of the feelings
You ever had for me were murdered..
But, assuredly, I still know.
One day you'll make your graceful return.
 
And I know you fled from the stars,
Before they ever got their chance to shine.
But they'll lead you back to me, darling.
Yeah, assuredly, I still know.
One day you'll make your graceful return.

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Jees. Tästä mää tykkäsin, mutta senhän jo tiesitkin. Täytynee lukea noi muutkin.

Tuli mieleen poppisbiisi helinätaustoilla. Kertsissä reverb-rummut.
 
Suomalaisilla on monesti ongelmana saada syvyyttä ja ideaa englannnin kielisiin teksteihin. Sinulla tässä kuitenkin oli näitä, mutta uskon että saisit paljon parempaa tekstiä suomeksi kirjoittamalla.

minulle tällainen casual bullshit vaan ei kolahda. turhanpäiväistä jorinaa ja sitäkin ihan liikaa. tiivistä. tiivistä. tiivistä.
ameriikassa varmasti uppois :D

Kaikkiin näihin esille laittamiisi teksteihin pätee sama: hyvää ja monipuolista kieltä, hyviä ilmaisuja, sujuvia ja koossapysyviä tekstejä -- toisin kuin suuri osa palstan englanninkielisestä tarjonnasta. Tyyli on selvästi löytynyt ja hallussa, joskaan se ei ole minulle itselleni kovin läheinen. Ei minulla ole varaa eikä tarvetta moittia näitä tekstejä.
 
EDIT: Oho! Kirjoitusvirhe! "entrancing"!

Kielikuvia, jotka tuntuu kiinnostavilta ideoilta. Tiivistämällä vois ehkä saada tiukemman kokonaisuuden. Toimii kuitenkin hyvin ja ehkä tarjoaa jotain uutta?